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Originally Posted by Larry Lee
Well, Brother, your poem's a start, but let's not overlook its numerous omissions, which include:
* Only one mention of our precious Jesus Holy name 
* No mention of God's favorite Church, Landover Baptist
* Tithing? Do you think it's optional?
* Gun ownership? Do you take it for granted?
* Osambo? Don't you think he's the antichrist?
* Your responsibility to breed soldiers for Christ? Your poem sure doesn't show any desire in that area
* Your love of BibleThumpinBlond's pie? Do you think we just know these things?
* Your desire to enjoy the fellowship of True Christians™ only and to leave fluffy bunny Christians behind? Where's that?
Well, I could go on, but probably others can add to the list I've started. |
Thank you immensely Brother. That is EXACTLY the type of critique I need. I shall thry to address these failings when writing again.
God Bless you and your literary skills.
