The Angst Land

[VinnieVespisti]

This lil 100% original Vinster Ditty© is a warning for everyone who is new here, it's about the dark christer underbelly of these forums..... a place they put you if you don't take their teachings serious, or if you get fresh with their lovely ladies.

The only way out is by hitting that goddam paypal button, but it's worth it if you value the integrity of your Man Cherry™..... they got a heap of gay dudes in there, and they all heap on top of you on your first day.... unless you ugly, which is an advantage I don't have.

I never wanna go there again.


I. The Burial Of The Vinster©

Eno was the cruellest mod, breeding
A hellhole called Quarantine, mixing
Real Men™ with tweensters, stirring
Whiny posts with pimply pain.
Helloin kept Clown warm, covering
His zit-pocked ass with lies, feeding
A lil pube big-boy compliments. ...

...uh Bin gar keine klown, stammerin' lithium, a true kraut.

And when they was together, egging each other on,
They gatecrashed my heterosexualist-type thread.
And I was kinda scared, Clown said, Vinnie,
Vinnie, hold on tight buns. And I ain't no homo.
In the belly of the beast, there you feel a lil Icky.
Assclown stalks online, much of the night, and goes south to his momma's basement.

Who are these dudes that crotch-clutch, what turds grow
Out of their crappy posts? Sons of Baptists
You ain't able to say, or guess, for you know only
A heap of derailed threads, where Clown beats off,
And the dead Fish gives no bible, the bulldyke no relief,
And the dry christer babe no love. Only
There is a stench in that forum,
(Come on into that goddam stinky forum),
And I will show you something different from either
Fish's rotten roe slitherin' behind you
Or Clown's whiny posts rising outta your moniter to meet you;
I will show you male-patterned baldness in a handful of avatars.

[Poetic Peter]

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Hello,

So you paid up, eh? It was worth it, yes. Now for the poem.

It's brimstone and Butchwax.
S1 ends most of its lines in the passive "ing" sounds of dejected punkism.
They kicked you righteously! In the remaining strophes you reempower your Fonzie-self.

It's pretty good stuff, though the content lies about our gentle pastors.
But here we crit form, not content, no matter what, unless it's offensive content.
The form is irregular and the content is wretchedly self-serving ranting.

Cut to the closure, which must be made sharp.
It's a near miss, dang it--it's got to be sharp as a shiv;
I see--apropos of nothing except for your next, higher road,
a harking toward "stars" with avatars. You have:

I will show you male-patterned baldness in a handful of avatars.

The rhythm gets busted there. Maybe instead something like (roughly):

See the male patterned bald lies of their avatars

It's OK, mostly. Nothing that calomel or high colonics can't fix.
Revision will sharpen the poem further. Thinking--cut every nonessential.

Welcome to freedom; we hope it'll last.




"We" means you alone, of course!

[Pastor Ezekiel]

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Vinnie, you are derivitave. Cut it out. Ginsberg, Kerouac and all those other homers did it better. You should stick to ripping off nigra singers.

[Deaner]

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I. The Burial Of The Vinster©

Vinnie, you disgusting wop; we put you in there hoping you would experience the love and compassion of Our Saviour and you come out a racist, accusing, homer-hater. You daygo's have a learning curve a mile long. If Pastor Eno see's your post he's gonna kick your pasta eating butt back in there.

Dean

[Rachael Van Helsing]

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Ah, so they let you out, huh, Vinnie? I'd better warn Mrs Rogers!

Your unrequited love for her is glaringly obvious.....

[VinnieVespisti]

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It's OK, mostly. Nothing that calomel or high colonics can't fix.

thanks bro - Vinnie appreciates your encougement-type words..... us poets gotta look after each other huh.

Vinnie, you are derivitave. Cut it out. Ginsberg, Kerouac and all those other homers did it better. You should stick to ripping off nigra singers.

Zekie, what the hell are you yabberin' about now? I weren't lucky enough to have a fancy-schmancy bible college edumacation like you did, so I ain't familiar with either of them homo writers.

Vinnie, you disgusting wop; we put you in there hoping you would experience the love and compassion of Our Saviour and you come out a racist, accusing, homer-hater. You daygo's have a learning curve a mile long.

whoooa! Vinnie ain't a racialist, and he ain't no homo-hater....... he just gets a lil spooked when they corner him in a bar, or on a thread.

I just keep my back to the wall, bud. ok, so it's not a homo-friendly thing to do, but it's not a hate crime neither.

Ah, so they let you out, huh, Vinnie? I'd better warn Mrs Rogers!

Your unrequited love for her is glaringly obvious.....

well well, if it ain't Rach Van Hellmatchmaker. Vinnie's worried about you sweetheart, and he's gonna give you the same helpful advice that were given to Mrs Rodgers, just before the old bat took away my PM function:

Do not go totterin' into that good night,
Old age should be botoxed at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of your Babeness©.

[Rachael Van Helsing]

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well well, if it ain't Rach Van Hellmatchmaker. Vinnie's worried about you sweetheart, and he's gonna give you the same helpful advice that were given to Mrs Rodgers, just before the old bat took away my PM function:

Do not go totterin' into that good night,
Old age should be botoxed at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of your Babeness©.

Nah, when I get older I'll just get older. All botox is is literally injecting poison into your skin.

As to my matchmaking...I'm just trying to be nice, Vinnie. You and Mrs Rogers both seem like you might benefit from some...action, so it's a win-win situation for both of you!

[Brother Temperance]

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Nah, when I get older I'll just get older. All botox is is literally injecting poison into your skin.

And all paganism is is literally injecting poison into your immortal soul! Which is worse?

[tommy]

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Oh the angst, oh the suffering...oh the everything...

When, oh, when will Jesus come to rescue us?

[Dr. Ernest C. Ville, D.C.S.]

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Oh the angst, oh the suffering...oh the everything...

When, oh, when will Jesus come to rescue us?

Soon, I assure you. Sooner than you'd think! I suggest you turn from your wicked ways, lest you be caught unprepared for the arrival of Jesus. He will be here very soon, very very soon, and you have a long ways to go before He will recognize you as one of His Own. I suggest you speak with a pastor about preparing for Jesus' arrival by starting on a generous tithing plan (to ensure that all back payments are in order before Jesus shows up)....

[SUV]

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Aw, Brother Vinnie - at least they let you keep your hair this time

[Rachael Van Helsing]

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And all paganism is is literally injecting poison into your immortal soul! Which is worse?

I'll take my chances.

[Pastor Ezekiel]

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I'll take my chances.

You have been offered the gift of eternal life with Jesus, and you willfully reject that in order to play russian roulette with satan?

You are truly depraved, woman.

[Rachael Van Helsing]

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ME depraved??? Let's not start on who's depraved, mister bear-wearing-a-tutu in your basement!

[Poetic Peter]

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What a great poetry thread!
It's sounding like a Broadway musical; like Cats

in a burlap bag.




Poetry Critics

Vinnie wrote a tasteless poem. It's
like a salad without greens,
a potato without starch,
steak without the meat.

Vinnie's poem is well-reviewed;
by whom? The Devil knows.
The basis of the trouble is, it's
not the poem that blows.