~ |Dying Angel| ~

[Shallow-izer (On Moderation)]

~ |Dying Angel| ~

Come dear angel,
Lay down your head here,
Close your eyes,
And listen to the snakes song,

Venemous voice,
Bites deep,
Drains you,
Now, you sleep,

How precious you are,

Oh sweet child,
hear how they laugh,
How they cheer,
At your fallen body,

What can you do?
You've been drained,
Dashed,
Forgotton,

Lay your head here,
Pass into sleep,
Close your eyes,
And be gone.

[Pastor Ezekiel]

Re: ~ |Dying Angel| ~

Sweet Jesus that was bad. Another gothtard wallowing in its own imaginary victimhood.

[Sista Lateefah]

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Well, I must say you is talented. Not everybody be able to write mediokra emo whinin' while playin' the wrist violin at the same time! You must be good at multi-taskin'. But try harder next time, alright? You's obviously not cuttin' deep enough.

[Jonathan H. Dona]

Re: ~ |Dying Angel| ~

Son, I have never in my days ever read anything in the Bible about angels dying. I mean, I appreciate your "artistic license" or whatever you heathens call it, but saying that an angel can die is just blasphemy.



"Neither can they die any more: for they are equal unto the angels; and are the children of God, being the children of the resurrection." Luke 20:36


As stated right there, angels are unable to die and saying so is against the word of the Bible. So how about you take your 6th grade English skills and your pseudo-intellectual poem back to elementary school and then go read the Bible. Do not write of what you do not know.

[Rachael Van Helsing]

Re: ~ |Dying Angel| ~

Shallow;
I believe you want this forum. You'll feel right at home.

[Shallow-izer (On Moderation)]

Re: ~ |Dying Angel| ~

XD>
Cakes.

This is what I get for basing a poem on an APC tune. In this case I tried to make a representation of what I saw in my head as I listened to Pet, and since I use a lot of angel symbology and mythology in my writing, I decided to cast this one as a "Fallen Angel."

Then we have the obvious wolf in sheep's clothing trying to persuade the angel to death. It's plan works.

I also took ques from "H." and ran off of that.

*Strokes beard.*

I was aiming for a more, "temptation by through illusions."

Didn't really pan out.

Oh well.

^___^

This site hasn't seen the last of my work.

[Unsaved and Loving It]

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This site hasn't seen the last of my work.

Huzzah!

It was a good piece of writing. Despite the horrid blasphemies, but oh well. Who am I to tell people blasphemy is bad?

[Mrs. Rogers]

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*Strokes beard.*

3 strands of wispy bum fluff upon your chin does not qualify as a "beard" - however, your lack of manly hormones may give you an edge as a poet, seeing as all male writers are a bunch of fruits anyway.

This site hasn't seen the last of my work.

Are you threatening us?!

[Talitha]

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Well, I must say you is talented. Not everybody be able to write mediokra emo whinin' while playin' the wrist violin at the same time! You must be good at multi-taskin'. But try harder next time, alright? You's obviously not cuttin' deep enough.

For once in my life I have to agree with our Resident Porch monkey person of Ethnic Origin.
By the way, repeat after me.............. "Down the Vein NOT across"............... "Down the Vein NOT across".

There, that's much better Isn't it.

By the way Shallowizer your Poetry made me want to go out and shoot my neighbors Dog.............. Which I have done.

I hope you feel proud.

[Joo (Quarantined)]

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3 strands of wispy bum fluff upon your chin does not qualify as a "beard" - however, your lack of manly hormones may give you an edge as a poet, seeing as all male writers are a bunch of fruits anyway.


Are you threatening us?!

But according to your church, don't men rank above women? What about fruity men? Are they below women?

[Pastor Ezekiel]

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But according to your church, don't men rank above women? What about fruity men? Are they below women?

You means queers? There are no queers in our church, as God clearly hates them. We do have several ex-queers, but they've been cured, thanks to Jesus and Sister Betty Bowers' BASH program.

[Unsaved and Loving It]

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You means queers? There are no queers in our church, as God clearly hates them. We do have several ex-queers, but they've been cured, thanks to Jesus and Sister Betty Bowers' BASH program.

What he refers to is level of importance. Are queer men held in the same regard as women in the "chain of superiority", as you call it, or are they held higher, or lower.

[Pastor Ezekiel]

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What he refers to is level of importance. Are queer men held in the same regard as women in the "chain of superiority", as you call it, or are they held higher, or lower.

Well I suppose that depends on how you look at it. Landover Baptist theologians are still debating whether women have souls or not. On the other hand an unrepentant queer is nothing but fodder for satan's fires. It may have a soul, but what good is it if its given freely over to satan?

What do you think, 'tardo?