[Poetic Peter]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

There are too many syllables in that final part, aren't there? There can't be more than 11, if we stick with the meter of the original:

Jesus loves the little children in the world

You're choosing a narrower lane for a rather arcane reason.
The poem can be just as biblical, without slaving to copy the Master's style.

If the content, if the message alone, does not hark to Bible scholars
your source of inspiration, well,

copying the metric style, in any result, is seen as a sort of gimmick here;
and given the -necessarily nasty form-, copying any aspect of the Biblical
style, is actually unChristian (if you think about it), because it is lampoonery.

Don't go that way or you'll look like me.

God forbid!

[Enobarbus]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

http://www.cyberhymnal.org/htm/j/e/jesloves.htm

Jesus loves the little children,
All the children of the world.
Red and yellow, black and white,
All are precious in His sight,
Jesus loves the little children of the world.

Jesus hates the filthy homers,
All the homers of the world.
They are an abomination
With Hell their final station
Jesus hates the filthy homers of the world.

[Father Maurice Lester]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

Jesus hates the dirty homers
All the homers of the world
Homers all are an abomination
And hell will be their final station
Jesus hates the filthy homers
-- all the homers of the world!

Tsk, tsk. Not only are we a little touchy about our spelling errors but it seems we are also given to the derivative lifting of other works.

I suspect Clare H. Woolston might have a good go at you in court if still alive.

Jesus loves the little children,
All the children of the world;
Red and yellow, black and white,
All are precious in His sight,
Jesus loves the little children of the world.

Bless you, my potential copyright infringer
Father Mo

[Enobarbus]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

Tsk, tsk. Not only are we a little touchy about our spelling errors but it seems we are also given to the derivative lifting of others work.

I suspect Clare H. Woolston might have a good go at you in court if she were alive.

Bless you, my potential copyright infringer
Father Mo

But since C Herbet Woolston died in 1927, his rhyme is now in the public domain. Apart from that, if you go back to where Brother Zeke started these little rhymes, we have acknowledged all along that we were rewriting his work. That would be legit even if he were alive -- as long as we make it plain what we are doing, and do not try to gain financially from it, no one is going to do take us to court.

You see it is doubtful whether a rhyme pattern can be copyrighted anyway. It could be arrived at independently, could it not? Especially a simple one.

And there is a lot more to it than that too -- we are parodying his song, so our new work is not derivative, but a work of art in its own right with its own message.

I'll leave it at that for now. It becomes very complicated. Suffice it to say that you are trying to teach your grandmother how to suck eggs.

[Poetic Peter]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner



Father,

Read it and leap
Read it and leap
Read it and leap
in the Fiery Lake

Read it and leap
oh read it and leap

Wise up take
a leap in the Lake

http://img481.imageshack.us/my.php?image=sound191pn7.swf

[Father Maurice Lester]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

But since C Herbet Woolston died in 1927, his rhyme is now in the public domain....It becomes very complicated. Suffice it to say that you are trying to teach your grandmother how to suck eggs.

Note my use of the word potential. This was a specific choice with the intent of obviating the common point of public domain regarding the work in question. The idea being there is little originality to be found in the exercise and the likelihood of original prose coming from a gang of disgruntled Baptists, jealous of the Catholic Church and it's rich tradition of art, is slimmer than Karen Carpenter after a last visit to her vomitorium.



Bless you, my future defendant
Father Mo

[Enobarbus]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

Note my use of the word potential. This was a specific choice with the intent of obviating the common point of public domain regarding the work in question. The idea being there is little originality to be found in the exercise and the likelihood of original prose coming from a gang of disgruntled Baptists, jealous of the Catholic Church and it's rich tradition of art, is slimmer than Karen Carpenter after a last visit to her vomitorium.

Bless you, my future defendant
Father Mo

You haven't read much of the thread have you?

Do you think that this has potential? It's not good I know, but with work could be improved:

THE VIOLATION OF THE ALTAR BOYS (A work in progress)

Father Mo was perspiring and his eyes were a gleam
His trousers were bulging fit to burst at the seam
The glow in his eyes was like a wolf's on the prowl
And he threw back his head and let out a great howl

For the altar boys' picnic was soon to take place
And Maurice was afire with the thrill of the chase
There'd be boys of all sizes: big thin fat and small
And Mo was determined to bugger them all

[Poetic Peter]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner



Yo! Yo!

Father be stoned
in hail!
Oh, Mary

by the noble Enobarbus



Peter
happy

to contribute wooly content
only when it's wholly Sunday;
stuffings for the Father's cassock;

it's known he makes a right-fine hassock

[Father Maurice Lester]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

You haven't read much of the thread have you?

Rather astute of you to catch that!

Do you think that this has potential? It's not good I know, but with work could be improved:

Start with the 'select all' and follow with 'delete'...or perhaps a few key word changes...allow me to suggest some.

THE VIOLATION OF THE WOOLY BOYS (A work in progress)

Crusty Eno was perspiring and his eyes were a gleam
His trousers were bulging fit to burst at the seam
The glow in his eyes was like a wolf's on the prowl
And he threw back his head and let out a great howl

For the ram and ewe picnic was soon to take place
Enorbarbus was afire with the thrill of the chase
There'd be sheep of all sizes: big thin fat and small
Eno was determined to bugger them all.



Bless you, my abuser of virgin wool
Father Mo

[Poetic Peter]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner



Father, this is Tailor Pee-Wee
Peter caught up in your fabric.
Raveled? It is not.

Once a thread begins a run
by God, dear Father
Threadbare Rue--
you show the whole

poet you are not, not yet.

So Keep On Plugging always

in the decent way
of course.

[Ixi]

Re: The landover baptists are truly quite mad

HOW WOULD YOU LIKE A HUNDRED WARNING POINTS?

Will they be shiny?

[Enobarbus]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner

Rather astute of you to catch that!




Start with the 'select all' and follow with 'delete'...or perhaps a few key word changes...allow me to suggest some.

THE VIOLATION OF THE WOOLY BOYS (A work in progress)

Crusty Eno was perspiring and his eyes were a gleam
His trousers were bulging fit to burst at the seam
The glow in his eyes was like a wolf's on the prowl
And he threw back his head and let out a great howl

For the ram and ewe picnic was soon to take place
Enorbarbus was afire with the thrill of the chase
There'd be sheep of all sizes: big thin fat and small
Eno was determined to bugger them all.



Bless you, my abuser of virgin wool
Father Mo

Now that definitely is copyright infringment and plagiarism -- you have lifted most of my words verbatim. My lawyer says you are certainly guilty but is suggesting we wait a few months so I am in a better position to prove loss of earnings and go for a bigger claim. I'll get back to you about this if you don't hear from my lawyer personally.

[Poetic Peter]

Re: The Poetasters' Korner


"pwnd"
again by the noble GODLY Enobarbus

____________




+To Father Mo-

In a former era,
you can bet your bottom buck,
that I was a vara
persistent vision known as Puck.



PS Farther,
no, I am not Eno's Roadie.
I'm only playing Holy Toady